Thursday 27 October 2016

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Maui and the octopus
By Stephanie
(tieka a maui just a retel)


In a burning hot desert lived 5 young men. One of them were named Maui. Maui was the bravest out of the group. He was not afraid of anything, well...he wasn't afraid of anything until the 57th of August. Maui saw a giant crack in the ground. Inside the crack were lots of lava and it was really really dark. Maui’s and his brothers were terrified. They were so scared because they had not seen this type of problem since 1921.
“What are we going to do’’ they all yelled. Sparks came out of the ground and they created a giant octopus. One of the brothers throw a stick at the octopus to see if it was safe. But when the stick hit the 8 tentacle beast the octopus pushed it aside. The octopus crushed Maui's house and went to electrocute other people in the land. “Hahaha hehehe I'm as clever as can be,” the octopus said as he stomped his way to the village. “We have to stop him’’ Maui said but his brothers were to scared to go so Maui went on his own. When he went outside he saw the octopus killing families with his 8 tentacles. Maui was getting a bit scared himself but at that vary moment Maui’s brothers came out with weapons and guns so they all defeated the octopus!  

The end !Common octopus










REFLECTION
What I found tricky was? The thing that made it tricky was?
Thinking about the whole story because it was really hard to figure out what happened next and it got easy
One thing I got better with was? What helped me to get better was?
Me trying to think of a ending because it was easy the first time but i had to change it and that was hard i had to think of another ending

Next time I would …put more speech and info into it

I am most proud of ...my whole story because I write a retell of TE IKA A MAUI and i love the sound of it

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